from the fish's mouth
the last minnow
wiggles free
the last minnow
wiggles free
posted by Anonymous at 9:47 AM
Tuesday, April 11, 2006
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3 Comments:
i like this one a lot
hi dustin - this is a striking image - i see it :-)
as a haiku it could perhaps stand another element - a completely different image even - a fragment as first line against what could be phrase:
fragment here
the last minnow wriggles free
from the fishes mouth
hope you don't mind me playing
i know that you just want to write how it comes - yes just do it!
keep them coming!
LO
Dustin,
Fresh idea. Do you mean 'from' rather than 'in'? Or is the minnow free within the other fish's mouth?
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