Tuesday, April 11, 2006

from the fish's mouth
the last minnow
wiggles free

5 Comments:

Blogger its_baxter said...

i like this one a lot

10:44 AM  
Blogger Little Onion said...

hi dustin - this is a striking image - i see it :-)

as a haiku it could perhaps stand another element - a completely different image even - a fragment as first line against what could be phrase:

fragment here
the last minnow wriggles free
from the fishes mouth

hope you don't mind me playing
i know that you just want to write how it comes - yes just do it!

keep them coming!

LO

12:21 PM  
Blogger Denis said...

Dustin,

Fresh idea. Do you mean 'from' rather than 'in'? Or is the minnow free within the other fish's mouth?

12:52 PM  
Blogger texas haijin said...

good call, denis.

2:40 PM  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I really like this one!

6:49 PM  

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