Down by the Black Brook we find signs of spring. New shoots on the hawthorn but not yet any blossom. A few minnows in amongst the coke cans. And here in the shelter of a willow, is it some child's den?
a damp mattress
scattered with needles
the coot's legs
.
Little Onion
Some Links:
The Chemical House .. Coot
a damp mattress
scattered with needles
the coot's legs
.
Little Onion
Some Links:
The Chemical House .. Coot
posted by Little Onion at 2:06 AM
3 Comments:
I kinda like this abrupt style of haibun.
Favourite bits are:
'Black Brook'; 'New shoots...'; 'A few minnows in amongst the coke cans.' I love that last one!
The haiku is an interesting contrast to the prose. Do I assume it's syringe needles which makes it very contemporary as to what might be in a child's den nowadays, or the timelessness of needles from a tree or bush?
I really like the stark juxtaposition of the last line, and forgoes any need for dashes, ellipses or periods.
Thought-provoking haibun.
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what the big bloke says and glad to hear that some kids are still making dens...
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