Sunday, March 12, 2006

Down by the Black Brook we find signs of spring. New shoots on the hawthorn but not yet any blossom. A few minnows in amongst the coke cans. And here in the shelter of a willow, is it some child's den?

a damp mattress
scattered with needles
the coot's legs

Little Onion

Some Links:
The Chemical House .. Coot


Blogger Area 17 said...

I kinda like this abrupt style of haibun.

Favourite bits are:

'Black Brook'; 'New shoots...'; 'A few minnows in amongst the coke cans.' I love that last one!

The haiku is an interesting contrast to the prose. Do I assume it's syringe needles which makes it very contemporary as to what might be in a child's den nowadays, or the timelessness of needles from a tree or bush?

I really like the stark juxtaposition of the last line, and forgoes any need for dashes, ellipses or periods.

Thought-provoking haibun.

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Blogger mattm said...

what the big bloke says and glad to hear that some kids are still making dens...

10:24 AM  

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