ukku spring haiku

Thursday, March 02, 2006

J. Andrew Lockhart said...: perfect -- is that your hand?; 7:04 PM
Little Onion said...: Hi Eric,

I like the feel of the haiku. I was wondering what it might look like with a slight change in order - to perhaps save the second two lines from maybe been to 'carry on' from the first line - i see the two dashes you have to make the cut after snow but i still read:

'march snow deepening my cabin fever'

i was wondering about:

march snow
my cabin fever
deepens

just a thought

thanks for sharing this picture and poem this haiga - it got me thinking.

Fight the fever!

Little Onion; 3:21 AM
Area 17 said...: A perfect meld of image and haiku I'd say! I've really enjoyed revisiting your photograph and haiku each time I come to ukku spring haiku.

I quite like little onion's suggestion, maybe an excuse to get another photograph with the differently worded haiku? I'm happy to be double-treated! (-;; 8:56 AM