posted by eric l houck jr at 7:38 PM
Saturday, March 25, 2006
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9 Comments:
Very nice!
Sangeet
Eric - the image is clear - i like it.
It's got me thinking around the issue using the 'ing' form of verbs in haiku - i think that they are fine to use - some hate them in haiku - they seem to think it's a rule not to use them - rubbish of course - but in recent years i've been inreasingly drawn to not using them without something infront of them - so here i'd be thinking to myself - who's rehanging the windchimes - of course the implication that its you is so great that many (me too at times) would say nothing else is needed - we find you - but i have found myself more and more watnting to have some signifier before this form of the verb - perhaps its a disease - i know that my friend Bill Higginson has also been having similar symptoms - maybe we'll recover...
in the meantime you write (and i like):
first warm day
rehanging
the wind chimes
Let me play:
first warm day
a man rehanging
the wind chimes
(No - awful)
first warm day
i spend it rehanging
the wind chimes
(mm...)
first warm day
i rehang
the windchimes
(i prefer to just rehanging perhaps)
oh - maybe best left is :-)
forgive me thinking out loud - medicine anyone?
Keep em coming Eric!
Little Onion
yes please chime in aurora 'Ding' - i pick up on the open endedness too - but now i have to tell everyone a deep secret - i have a deep hatred of wind chimes - well in particular if they are in anyone's garden that lives within earshot of my bedroom - and i've also developed an aversion to windchime haiku in general - somehow they usually have too much of the stench of zen or even worse faux zen about them - so me liking eric's rehanging haiku is unusual to say the least - maybe i'm hoping that he's actually rehanging those of my neighbours somewhere a long long way from their current position - maybe Antartica or Moonbase 5...
Oh dear I really am becoming a grumpy old man.
Thanks for your chime :-)
Little Onion
Eric, I love the way your art depicts the sound/movement of a windchime!
Enjoyed the haiku too...and the discussion...
:-)
Lary
'dong' - yes you are of course right - i've been grumpy a long time - i was a teenage albert tatlock - which will probably only mean something to those of a particular familiar with Coronation Street... anyone?
Little Onion
(now look where your haiku has taken us Eric - and i'm strting to wonder if windchimes have ever featured in Coronation Street and if so which character owned them - the Ogdens had their mural sorry Muriel but windchimes?)
Albert Tatlock:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Albert_Tatlock
thanks everyone.
l'il onion -- i dislike windchimes myself if they are overdone, but a single windchime, placed at a respectable distance and then touched lightly by that first breeze carrying just a hint of the coming spring . . .
Eric,
I love the ku. Grew up with tinkling windchimes in the background; it became part of the weather (as your ku shows). Sometimes, silence can be louder.
Ahhh... I love my wooden wind chimes, and we have many, but after the winter they all need an adjustment... Don't change a word... :D
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